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Paintover: Hidden Shop by arisuonpaa Paintover: Hidden Shop by arisuonpaa
I was asked to give critique for this painting: iyulian.deviantart.com/art/the…. I see a paintover as one of the best ways to show suggestions. In fact some of my most valuable learning experiences involve people doing paintovers on top of my own paintings. And the help came from people that I don’t even know. So I thought it’s time for me to do the same!

For realistic results one always needs to have proper reference. Searching for “mushroom” in DeviantArt stock photos I found this: maadobs-garden.deviantart.com/…. It gives a nice reference for the “building” and also for the vegetation around it. And the vegetation is needed to give the sense of scale. My version has a larger scale as the original is really tiny if it fits among the grass. On the other hand there is also smaller grass growing on the building itself, so I’m a bit confused about the intended scale.

To avoid a flat image one needs distinct foreground, midground, and background. They can be separated by using atmospheric perspective — that is using lighter values and less contrast in the background. The original painting has the darkest values in the background, which is fine when depicting darkness in the background (such as night), but here the foreground is also lit although the visible lights are in the midground. Speaking of lights, I think there a too many of them competing for the viewer’s interest. I left only the ones that were off the dead center. A weaker warm light could be added for one of the windows to show someone is inside at the moment. For a natural outdoors look there needs to be temperature contrast. In daylight it would be warm sunlight vs cold shadows that reflect the sky color. In this case it would be warm lamps contrasting the dimmer blue light (again the sky) from above. For added depth I had the lamps go in perspective from the foreground to the midground.

My version is way too rough for a real painting, but I think a quick sketch like this demonstrates the points mentioned above. Still doing this had me realise my own weakness, which is the usage of random brush strokes to depict some detail that I’m just too lazy to do correctly. But the fact is, spending a bit more time to determine the correct brush strokes would in the end save time, since it wouldn't need any adjustments or repainting later. There is no excuse for doing just random scribble in hopes it would turn out good. Every probability says it won’t.
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bawathor Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wow !
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raine0678 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love all your art
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LaceyJibs Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
Beautiful work ! Clap 
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HikariShuyo Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm still confuse which brush should I use when I draw something. But like everybody says, "practice make perfect", right? Thx again for the tutorial :)
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arisuonpaa Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013
Use any relatively hard edged brush. Avoid overusing the soft ones, since it gives a blurry look.
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HikariShuyo Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
okay,gonna try again. Thx again XD
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Rhythmspinning Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! I want someone to do something like this for me!
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Retsilia Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think doing others works like this is really teaching! I can see what you meant clearly and I believe it'll help the original maker just like the others helped you. Great job! :clap:
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Zupashii Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
this is beautiful <3
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doctorwhodewitt Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
nice one!
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Mascot801 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Artist
Think you can maybe do this with mine some time in the near future?
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:iconarisuonpaa:
arisuonpaa Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
At some point maybe, but not it the near future. Send me a PM later.
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AbysmalSecrets Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
this is so cool. :) I like it
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Chorongee Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist
i likes it~I say
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musicalsilent Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Both are amazing! But I do see what you mean. You explain things so well!! :clap:
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alrud617 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
Oh wow, it's beautiful! What a creative idea. I hope I'll get better by reading and looking at your arts.
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SSGJoey Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow, nice job on both paintings. and what a great critique. I learned a lot by the comments then studying both to see and understand.  it really helps me with my art. thanks:D (Big Grin) 
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Chronochu-Chan Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Student General Artist
 WoW the improvement -u- ... brings tears of joy to my eyes ;U;
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heidi137 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
J'adore les deux, du beaux travailClap Clap Hug 
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iyulian Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey, thanks for help, I can see what I can improve :D
The composition is something I always forgot about, and not only.
I'll keep all the tips in head and I'll make a new painting .
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Duzloo Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
I like the design of the old shop, yet the new one is clearly more hidden. And all the moss looks so wet and soft, it's really nice to look at that.
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calikal Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very useful and I love the result you got
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Faliara Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013
Wah~
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doodlescribble Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Your notes on lighting are really useful; I'll keep them in mind when doing environments.

To add my 2 cents on this, I think the original painting's green grass somewhat distracts the viewers away from the mushroom, since the color is too saturated.  So I like what you did with the repaint and made the red really stand out.  And I get what you mean about too many lights that distract the viewer; I'm sort of guilty of this at times.
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